Asking for information: educational service providers
Week 19 · Theme 3, Lesson 4 Communicating with Educational Service Providers · 3 lessons
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A formal email, part by part
ICT P6 Term 2, Theme 3: pp. 22–25
GoalWrite the seven parts of a formal e-mail on paper for an invented reader.
New words
formal · polite and careful, with full sentences and no slangsubject line · the short title that tells what the e-mail is aboutgreeting · the polite words at the start, such as ‘Dear Sir or Madam’closing · the polite words at the end, before your name
Explanation
Contacting an ESP by e-mail should be formal. A formal e-mail has seven parts, in this order. One: the subject line, a short title such as ‘Question about bees’. Two: the greeting, such as ‘Dear Sir or Madam’. Three: the introduction, saying who you are. In our paper practice the sender is always ‘a Primary 6 pupil’, so we never write a real name, age, school or address. Four: the reason you are writing. Five: one clear question. Six: thanks for the reader’s time. Seven: the closing, such as ‘Yours sincerely’, and then the sender line. Use full sentences, polite words and no slang, no emoji and no capital-letter shouting. After you send an e-mail, you may receive an automatic reply that thanks you and says when to expect an answer. It is only a receipt; the real answer comes later.
Part
Its job
1. subject line
says what the e-mail is about
2. greeting
starts politely
3. introduction
says who you are (a Primary 6 pupil)
4. reason
why you are writing
5. clear question
what you want to know
6. thanks
thanks for the reader’s time
7. closing
ends politely
Worked examples
Part
Example sentence
subject
Question about bees
greeting
Dear Sir or Madam,
introduction
I am a Primary 6 pupil.
reason
I am writing a school report about bees.
question
Which pages explain how bees make honey?
thanks
Thank you for your time.
closing
Yours sincerely, a Primary 6 pupil
An invented example, part by part. The e-mail is about bees and is written by ‘a Primary 6 pupil’ to an invented online library. Read the sentence of each part in the table.
Informal
Formal
hey, tell me bee stuff!!!
Could you please tell me which pages explain how bees make honey?
From informal to formal. Informal: ‘hey, tell me bee stuff!!!’ Formal: ‘Could you please tell me which pages explain how bees make honey?’ The second one is polite, clear and complete.
send the e-mail→automatic reply: received→wait for the real answer
An automatic reply arrives at once: ‘Thank you for your e-mail. We will answer within 24 hours.’ Farida understands that it only confirms that her message arrived. She waits for the real answer.
Class activity
Write a pretend formal e-mail on paper to an invented online museum. Ask one clear question about a topic you like. Label the seven parts with coloured pencils. The sender is ‘a Primary 6 pupil’: write no real name, age, school or address. A partner checks that all seven parts are there and in the right order.
Practice
1
Put in order: question, greeting, subject line.
Subject line, greeting, question.
2
Why should an e-mail ask one clear question?
So the reader knows exactly what you need and can give a useful answer.
3
What is an automatic reply?
A message sent by a program that thanks you and says when to expect an answer.
4
Why do we write ‘a Primary 6 pupil’ and not a real name?